I glide gracefully, looking down at the world below me. I swoop over the trees, adjusting my wing to catch the breeze. I feel the strong winds blow over me, calming my thoughts. I am a sparrow, I think to myself. I am me. As I think this, I get a bad feeling. I look up. Up, high in the sky, regarding me with beady eyes: a hawk. I don’t take time to recognize what kind. Knowing I’ve noticed it, it dives at me, screaming. Knowing it will be easier to escape, I dive, too. Down, down towards the trees. Though I am already lower, the hawk is faster. It is a race for safety. We both fly to live. I fly to escape the hawk, a predator. It flies to catch prey, to eat. One of us must lose. The hawk is too close. It stretches its talons, ready to catch me and fly away before it crashes into the tall trees. I realize quickly that speed is not the answer to survival. I am a sparrow. I am agile. The question lies in the unknown, though. It may be intimidating, but is it any match for me? There is no time to think. It rakes its talons forward, hoping to win the contest of survival, but I am not ready to give myself up.
I flap my wings and flit to the right. It is not ready for that move. It puts on the brakes, which gives me time to escape and plan my next move because I know that it will not give up until it has caught me.
I may not be able to escape completely, but I can put death off until I have reached the bottom of the hill of life. I have already climbed to the peak, and I am climbing down, wishing there was not a bottom waiting for me.
The hawk flies a sharp turn around, and as it streaks at me, I feint to the right and dive down again. Swooping and diving, he chases me where I hoped he would: down into the trees, where there is an obstacle course of branches as an arena. As I pass under the treetops, I am surprised by the sudden dimness. I can’t see him for a second, but then he is there right behind me. We dodge branch after branch, but I can’t seem to get him off my tail. My wings are sore, and I am getting tired, and yet, I still fight for my life. Suddenly, I see him putting on an extra burst of speed, and I feel his sharp talons finally closing around me. I tuck my wings into my body, knowing he will carry me away. The claws cut into me, causing pain throughout my entire body. The talons pierce further into my body. The hawk flaps his wings, lifting us higher, up past the treetops into the bright light of the sun. I twist my head to look up at him. In the glare of the sun, I make out his eyes staring straight ahead of him. They seem to tell me, “That’s just the way it is.” And I know that it is true. The race has ended. And I have lost. I close my eyes.
* * *
The Hawk
I carried the sparrow away from the forest. I could sense him looking up at me, and I looked straight ahead. I would not give any mercy. I did not look down as, slowly, his breathing stopped. I carried him towards my nest to feed him to my little eyases, my babies. I tried not to respect the brave little bird who was now lifelessly clutched in my talons. I did not like thinking those thoughts because hawks should be fearless. I had to kill him to keep my precious youngsters alive. I flew towards the sun with my strong wings pumping at a steady beat.



This story is very graceful and I think it says that nature and life is just how it is.
Comment by Adine on December 10, 2010.
I could feel the wind, I knew the hawk was stronger but I knew that the sparrow had more intellegence. It was a great story . I reconized that the writer has
a strong brain and good writing skills. If you could make the story longer it
would be better. You are a very nice writer.
Thank you
Jesse Lewandowski
age 8 4 days till 9
USA, staying in CZ ,Prauge
1/7/2011/
Comment by Jesse Lewandowski on January 7, 2011.
i liked how u put how the hawk was thinkig to i also liked how you didnt make the sparrow the big hero, there are losers in the world,right?
Comment by Dona bill on January 21, 2011.
It’s a very touching story, but you might want to add a little more detail, like describing what the sparrow looks like and how they dodged the branches.
Comment by Annika on January 27, 2011.
Hi Lulu Russell,
I loved this. It is written very nicely. As I was readying I was able to visualise the scene.
Lakshmi,
India
Comment by Lakshmi on January 28, 2011.
Hi Lulu,
My third graders just read your story. It was the best story David ever heard. Joey thought it was very interesting and touching. Morgan thinks you stayed on topic well and didn’t add other things like, “I love hawks.” That would take away from your story idea. Shannon thinks your illustration is cool. Anthony likes the way you describe the fight. Annalise thinks you are a really good writer because you had lots of detail. Maddy likes your ideas. I love the way you added the hawk’s perspective at the end.
Mrs. Coffey
Salem, Virginia
Comment by Mrs. Coffey on February 23, 2011.
I have been reading a lot of the stories, as I am thinking of submitting one of my own.
I have a couple of suggestions, even though it is amazing well writ.
-Put a little more into the hawk part, it’s really good but it didn’t have enough juice
-What do they look like?
-Voice!
Really good though
Hearts,
Chace
Comment by Chace Pulley on March 8, 2011.
Wow! That was really good! I could image everything in extreme detail! I think you will grow up to be an award winning author! Keep ‘em coming!
Comment by Aidan Burke on March 26, 2011.
nice story u could have added more detail though
Comment by sadia on April 3, 2011.
Absolutely wonderful story
Comment by Sadia on April 4, 2011.
Hi Lulu,
I love it! My favorite parts are the verbs of their battle and the bittersweet emotions to his thoughts. I like your analogy of a life-for-life situation!
From Lauren in Shanghai, China.
Comment by Amy on April 25, 2011.
Nice job. Sorry for the sparrow though. *sighs* I guess it’s just life.
Comment by Emmie on April 25, 2011.
A nice story with lots of feelings. Write more!
Comment by Evan on May 30, 2011.
This story is fab! Wish I could write like this…*sighs*
Comment by Eve on July 23, 2011.
When the sparrow died, it made me cry. HARD! But it is very detailed
Comment by Undiscovered101 on August 3, 2011.
It was so sad but I know that the hawk had to feed her babies.
Comment by Amelia on August 3, 2011.
nice one i like it
Comment by Arham on August 22, 2011.
good story it had lots of deatal and i ENJOED IT !!!!!
Comment by Vincent Guerrero on September 16, 2011.
it was not too long or too short i also like how you did two characters
Comment by jordandias on September 16, 2011.
im ugly but book are ugly
Comment by yvonne on September 16, 2011.
How wonderful!!!
Comment by sandi thompson on September 18, 2011.
Your story is written very poetically and with great perspective: both in the way you capture the thoughts of the birds, and in the way you switch between the two side of your story. Well done!
Comment by M on October 2, 2011.
I was wondering if any of u guyz think the writer didn’t make a smart choice. I think the sparrow shouldn’t die. Somebody tell me u agree with me. Anyways, this story is more like a poem than a real story.
Comment by Carla :-) on November 6, 2011.
HI friends, I like this story very much.I read many stories but this story is much interesting
The writer should get award for that story but you should add some more sentences
The story have a true nature.
Comment by Malaika on November 9, 2011.
It would be better If you use this mark – instead of a colon : .
Great story though.
Comment by Akshayaa on November 21, 2011.
thanks, akshayaa. my english teacher said the same thing.
Comment by Lulu (author) on November 28, 2011.
This story really felt real to me. I had a very clear image of what was going on in my mind. I really want to be an author. I will try to write like you someday.
Comment by Edie on December 3, 2011.
Story was great a little sad but i enjoyed it.
Comment by Isaac on December 4, 2011.
TROLOLOLOLOLOLOL
Comment by imnotdylanfowler on December 7, 2011.
This is an excellent well written story.
Comment by Daniel on December 15, 2011.
I agree with comment #23 by Carla. Mostly I agree that the story is more like a poem than a real story. It was well written, though.
Comment by Williamette on December 15, 2011.
Wow. That captured the beauty of nature perfectly. It also captured feelings, the hawk really feels, and it made me realize that even the seemingly worst enemies do have feelings, needs, hopes, prayers. Thank you so much!
Comment by Mary on January 7, 2012.